Thanks for the comments about the pieces that jag. It's appreciated. As "fanfic" it possesses no potential whatsoever -- it's more an exploration and writing exercise than anything else. Granted, a really long one but *shrugs*
The 1st-person angle can be a very difficult one not to break out of. I think that one of the reasons I chose to do it this way was simply because it makes for good practice. =D General writing muscle flexing, but Black's story is told this way as well. And the language and sentence structure fragmentation in this -- I think that goes a long way toward conveying Vin Diesel's character of Dominic Toretto as much as anything else does. Food for thought as I edit my way through "Black".
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The 1st-person angle can be a very difficult one not to break out of. I think that one of the reasons I chose to do it this way was simply because it makes for good practice. =D General writing muscle flexing, but Black's story is told this way as well. And the language and sentence structure fragmentation in this -- I think that goes a long way toward conveying Vin Diesel's character of Dominic Toretto as much as anything else does. Food for thought as I edit my way through "Black".